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help me with my english?

ok, so i need to write a letter to a friend who is going on holiday that i have been on i need to advise them stuff and not recommend them stuff (dos that make sense?) anyway can you check it please and make it more friendish but something thats gets me a high level but at the same time not to sound too tour guidish, thx I have recently heard that you are going on holiday to Spain, Majorca, as I have visited the island many times, I shall recommend some lovely places you can visit while you’re on your stay. It’s a pleasant island with friendly people and I hope you enjoy it. I have stayed at many hotels but so far the best was probably Panoramic Hotel in Alcudia, apart from their outstanding service, great entertainment and an excellent range of food, the hotel is also situated in a nice secluded cove. If you’re looking for nice large pools and spacious rooms with air conditioning, you may want to try the Clumba Mar hotel in Can Pica Fort as it have great pools, one of which have just been built. For the restaurants, I recommend a lovely restaurant called Monaco, in Can Pica Fort, it has an excellent menu, serving fine Spanish cuisine examples of the fine food includes fresh grilled squid, large grilled sardines and of course there’s also Spain’s national dish paella. There is also a wonderful cafe/restaurant called Oasis on the beach front of Can Pica Fort, it has wonderful entertainment and also serves a large range of Spanish dishes and drinks. There are many fantastic restaurants/cafes in Majorca and I highly recommend you try them out. Although they have delicious Spanish cuisine, I wouldn’t advise you to eat foreign food in Majorca as they seem to be more experienced their Spanish dishes. You may wish to visit the market that travels around Majorca which visits most of the resorts and sells a range of clothing, leather goods, arts and crafts etc. In Spain you may want to avoid shopping at around 2-4pm as the Spanish like to have their fiesta between those hours. I have also been to a giant carting track in Majorca, this is the biggest cart track in the whole of Majorca, it is very fun and it also has a lovely cafe very near it. If you’re looking for a fun time I highly recommend you come and try this cart track out. Have a pleasant time. btw what level (England) do u think i will get for this piece of work? btw what level (England) to u think i will get for this piece of work?

Public Comments

1. To Be Honest with you, i think it is really good, don't add anything on, it is good, i think you will get a good mark!
2. It's really good as it is! :) I can't think of anything that would improve it but near the beginning, you put 'you're' instead of 'you are' and 'it's' instead of 'it is'.. I suggest you change those as it makes it sound quite informal and I don't think teachers like it when people abbreviate words in essays.. But apart from that, it's great - well done!!
3. it is really good what you may want to include for each point is why you thought each thing was an advantage to your holiday if you can give evidence than it makes your writing more solid apart from that it is brilliant very persuasive. I want to go there after reading it answer mine please http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Ag66eePdSL6ts4rOjVfdu7XCxQt.;_ylv=3?qid=20090629104615AA2lsLo
4. A very good advice! need to change nothing. I'm not sure about the Level thingy, because your composition needs editing. Here is an example: "I have ......... to Majorca, Spain. " Good luck!